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When the word "bias" first made its way past my retna and began to rattle around my skull, I immediatley jumped to the news coverage of the recent Olympic loss Canada suffered at the hands of the U.S. team. For the last week, newspapers and broadcasts have been littered with the tale of how Canada, a country known for its Hockey pride, lost against the United States (BOO!!).
However, if we are looking at this from the perspective of biased, here is a clear example of a kind of political/nationalist bias in the media. Obviously, it would be suicidal for any news organization to try to sell newspapers in a Canadian city that read "U.S. Wipes Ass With Canada", however, if we are talking strictly slanted, Canadian press has put its focus on how crushing the defeat was for Canadians.
Every story recants how some players zigged when they should have zagged, and the profound effect this loss has had on the players and the fans alike while ignoring the celebratory tone of the U.S. team, having beaten the Canadians on their turf, at thier own game. Biased? Yes. But only for the sake of the audience.
*picture taken from here
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ReplyDeleteGreat post Claire!
The only errors I found were:
- The spelling of "retina". You typed it as "retna", but it maybe you did this for style?
- The spelling of "immediately". You wrote it as "immediatley".
Awesome writing!
In paragraph it says, "from the perspective of biased..." The word 'biased' sounds like a verb, when in fact you are writing it with the intention of it being a noun. Therefore it should simply say 'bias'.
ReplyDeleteAfter "U.S. Wipes Ass With Canada" the punctuation more appropriate to come before 'however' would be the semicolon.
The word 'recants' is used to highlight how news stories viewed a hockey game in its aftermath. Recant by definition means "to make a formal retraction or disavowal of a previously held statement or belief". The word you were probably looking for would be 'recounts'.
In the last paragraph, 4th line down, the word their is spelled incorrectly as 'thier'.
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ReplyDelete•You should have written 'retina' instead of 'retna'
•The word 'immediately' is also spelt wrong
•In the second paragraph, However should be followed with a semi-colon instead of a comma. Also, the following sentence should be cleaned up a little in order to provide a clearer message (If we look at this from a biased persepective, the coverage of the Olympics is a clear example of political/nationalistic bias in the media)
A good article all in all though.
You really have a way of catching people's attention, Clare!
ReplyDeleteI believe a semicolon must precede 'however' after 'U.S. Wipes Ass With Canada' (how do you come up with stuff like this? Ha ha!)
Otherwise, it was definitely one of the more entertaining takes on bias.